Deconstructing & Re-crafting

This is my Deconstructing & Re-crafting writing. My literacy teacher wrote a sentence or two about anything and then we have to destroy the piece of writing she wrote and then re-write it again in a better version. I really like practicing my deconstructing & re-crafting because it helps me write in a better descriptive way. At the bottom is the piece of writing that my literacy teacher wrote and underneath that is my piece of writing. I hope you like my deconstructing & re-crafting writing.

As I sat on the dock, I felt something tugging on my line. I tried to pull it up but it felt like I was being pulled in. I tried to think of what to do. I looked around but there was no-one to help me.

As Kate was enjoying sitting on the beautiful dock, she felt something tugging on her fishing rod. Kate was so frustrated she stood up and tried to pull it up, but it felt like she was being pulled into the freezing ice cold water. She didn’t want that to happen so Kate was thinking very hard of what to do. Nobody was around her so she couldn’t get some help, but she kept looking for somebody.

During she was seeking for help the thing just disappeared into nowhere just like that. Then later on, the thing was back and then it started tugging real hard on her line. Kate was getting very very annoyed of it. Suddenly Kate had a brilliant idea. She slid her hand in her left warm wooly pocket and then dialed her dad’s phone number and rang him. Ring ring ring. In a few seconds later her dad, Phil answered his phone and she was blabbering to him